Rolling bck my memories of kohima,"partying hard"!! they say...bunch of teenagers high on alcohol @new years eve...around 11.30 wen the whole of the world anxiously waiting for new hopes ... promising resolutions,breakin off the ice of hatred and enemity.....the night had plans for the well off boozers of the town,hard to forget wat i witnessed four teenagers lying in the road filthy and wallowed in blood..did i say four yes but one was still alive just tryin 2 figure out wats tat just happened...crying over his dead frens ...yes he was lucky !!!as far the locals were concerned including me it all happened this four were speeding on a jeepsy ...and had confronted with a truck which was parked...guys probably trying stunts i guess !!! skided against the truck three of them thrown out the jeepsy ,died on the spot first the faces were not recognizable swollen and bloody...one was my school mate!!!!...when the reports came over the nxt day in the paper..alcohol sucks life f****!!
"Sayonara"
the starting was well paced..but could have better presented. instead of using short hand language and '.....',i'd suggest you to keep it original,simple. it'll also increase your writing and vocabulary. keep writing..you've got a good sense of writing,and with practice you have the potential to be a very dynamic writer. the overall message of the post was very good...but as i said,keep writing so that you can present it in a better way. :-)
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ReplyDeleteAwesome! the only demerit is its written in contraction ( self made)! But the whole idea was great and I was really moved by it. I'm perceiving a very profound writer in you. Keep writing! Raan said that you should make it original. But I think you have tried extremely well to make it simple and original. What you need is just to write, write and write and you can easily pave ur way to a dynamic writer!
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